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When it Falls Hard Around by ~Holland---1945:iconHolland---1945:



When it falls hard around the windows levelled with my head,
I turn away

More often than not, I fetch this back -- my shirt -- because for once, the air hangs chilled
Thick, and braided still
From one night's wonderkill --
And wondered still
The thunder, here, and I'll secret you hail
For I've been in this house for weeks
And wondered still
When it falls hard around your chamber, door, and artery,
It shouldn't be unheard of for you to encumber me
To spring on the back and rend the threads
In two and three and seventeen
I've been inside this house for weeks
There's karma in the boards
©2007-2009 ~Holland---1945
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Author's Comments

Definitely experimental .... And about a million things. Well actually, like two. So .... Yeah. There you go.

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:iconbunnyheadwounds:
Your writing is pretty awesome.
I particularly dig the ending lines.

I don't know... It's got... A vibe. Which I dig.

Uh... I should say something more intelligent, but there you go.

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.
:iconholland---1945:
Don't worry about being intelligent. You are, I know that .... You don't have to be .... Verbacious, if you don't want to be :D

Thanks so much! I'm happy you dig my vibes.
:iconbunnyheadwounds:
:giggle: Oh man, we're pulling out all the stops! Verbacious. I love it. An awesome vocabulary is goddamn awesome.
Next time I'll try and critique more eloquently. I promise.

:glomp:

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.
:iconholland---1945:
Verbacious is a great one to have in the proverbial back pocket at all times. As is proverbial, for that matter. :D
:iconbunnyheadwounds:
I DIG proverbial.
Actually my favourite word for AGES has been phantasmagoria. :D

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.
:iconholland---1945:
Awesome.

I say "indelibly" a lot lately. It's an excellent adverb.
:iconbunnyheadwounds:
It IS! :D

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We didn't give it a mouth so it cannot complain.

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