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Here is the place my mother fled: An ivy-covered garden shed
A quaint and crooked call-to-arms
By hook-latch-linger in the deeper shade
In here you're locked for thick, hot days.
And here is where you'll hold yourself, careful 'round the middle, to remind you that July is troubled, hot, but never murderous.

With a bang to make Israel proud, you straddled the pipeline.
Without a flame to mark your step, nor dram to sting your throat,
With a trowel began to dig
Upon the lock so deeply sullied (rusted root and picker's bone into the metal had been sewn)
And long since then
Without a wraith you returned to once-loved place inside a home with no debate upon the usual places: The things a year erases.

And here, in 1944, with whiz-bangs decimating shore
My mother, twenty at the time, fled to this shed with glistening key
In shining lock;
Held back the front of years ago
Remembered by the woman before her.

Here now, the lock is crippled in old age
With amputated arm-and-leg (a horror of the shell-fire on the beach).
And shall I light a candle for our fickle close relations?
A shrine to bitter standoff 'tween our nerve-end generation?
Bleeding not for nation but for "Surely, you will understand a stronger hand has come to take the worn-in place of yours" --
This must be why the garden shed, the shell-hole where my mother fled, lies in the shade
A perfect place to calculate
A massive and decisive raid.

And here's the spot we drank of wine which had grown sweet in little time
And traced your lips on fingertips
And finally decided I was better off within the light
Cast by a candle in the shed
Where momentarily we'd fled
To cull from one another: Love, the July we'd been detailed of for years before our meetings here, and inexplicably, I fear: Until now, I'd been wary of this fettered afternoon
Blistering and festooned
On every porch from which the war-parade is now inspected
And here, with cautious kiss, I send you off.
©2007-2009 ~Holland---1945
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Author's Comments

That is a long poem, isn't it ....
I wrote this in one go, quite feverishly, with very little editing. It has to do with a lot of different things. 'Cause it's a poem, and it's personal. Yeah.
(I'll throw it out there for those who don't know me in person that I am not an anti-war type (not up for debate). Y'know, just so no one gets the wrong impression from this little piece .... It just isn't about that.)

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I ddin't get anti-war at all. I felt it sounded morer of a world war 2 sort of thing. In fact I wonder is saying your not anti-war will get you criticism.

Only problem with this poem physically is the line

In here you're locked for thick, hot days.

Which my mind reads as looking either like a inproper use of grammar(improper use of you're where it changes to possibly "you were".) Or simply poor word choice.

I read it and think it should be.


In here you're locked in four thick, hot days.

which--as you can see--Is totally screwed up. And I thought the best thing to do with this line would be possibly.


In here you are locked thru thick, hot days.

or possibly

In here you were locked during thick, hot days.

Blaagh. Maybe I'm just in the wrong zone for it tonight. I feel it doesn't flow right but can't seem to fix it.
:weed:

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I see what you mean -- Never really thought of it, actually. I always try to choose my words very carefully, and fit them into my standard rhythm thing, but I can see why that might not read well. I thought of it more as a deconstructed sentence, instead of saying "you are/were locked in the shed for days and it was hot" I just kind of cut up the words and rearranged them. I don't know if I'd change it -- but I do like "In here you're locked through thick, hot days" .... Even though the contraction "you're" is the issue .... Aaahh! I don't know.

Thanks though! I appreciate it.
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I showed my mom this and she like it. ;p
This one is my favorite. :D

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